Tuesday, 28 March 2017

Persuasive writing - TRANSACTIONAL

This week we looked at some pictures of the deforestation happening in Australia and the effect its having on their native animals. We wrote persuasive texts to explain why we think this should stop. Here are some examples of our writing.
WALT use emotive language
WALT use a range of sentence starters

Save our environment

Did you know that one and a half acres of forest is cut down every second? If Australia don’t start taking care of their indigenous animals, they may not have any left.  The continuing destruction of their habitats at the rate they are now, will force native animals to find a different location to settle into. Have you ever gone to the zoo, What if all the animals go extinct? The only thing at the zoo would be the empty enclosures or sad, lonely looking animals waiting for a mate.

The Animal Kingdom relies on food chains. Food chains are very important to all plants and animals. If plants were to die out, all animals will suffer. One plant going extinct leads to another then the animal, this is called the domino effect. The domino effect can occur when animals and plants will die from hunger. Many reasons that the animals could die out is because their prey would be no more so their would be nothing left for them to feast on. To us that’s like having no Breakfast, Lunch and Dinner.

The majority of countries have their own native animals. If we keep on demolishing their habitats, then they won’t have a place to live and they will die from starvation.. If the country's native animals went extinct, tourists will stop coming and the economy of the country will drop. If the helpless native animals go extinct there would be no more native animals to breed, so animal breeders would also lose their jobs. The country that the animal inhabits wouldn’t be so eye catching. Zoo’s who keep endangered animals safe from the dangerous wildlife would also lose money since the animals they protect would be no more. If a Koala was to move to another country the Koala would have no food to eat this is because Eucalyptus trees are only in Australia.

If Australian companies and business continue to be greedy and cut down innocent animals, natural habitats.  It won’t just affect that animal but all animals that are linked to it with the food chain or food web. The Amazon Rainforest is losing 150 acres every minute of every day, and 78 million acres lost every year. More than 20 percent of the Amazon rainforest is already gone, and much more is severely threatened as the destruction continues.

Great work Samarah and Chantelle, you have used lots of emotive language and rhetorical questions to make your audience think. Your reasons are clear and supported by evidence and facts. Your next step is to make sure that your examples are relevant eg Are foxes a native Australian animal affected by deforestation?

Miss Richardson


People on earth are making an immense mistake by destroying animal habitats.  The native forests of the world are being cut down everyday, forcing their native animals out of their homes.  It is unfair on the animals as these creatures need certain habitats to survive!  Would you like it if someone came to your house and used TNT to destroy it?  Where would you live?  Would it be nice?  Think about it...  it is important that we should help save animal habitats and stop destroying trees.  

Did you know that there is more than 150 acres lost every minute of every day, and 78 million acres lost every year?  20 percent of the Amazon rainforest is already gone, and much more is severely threatened as the destruction continues.  It is estimated that the Amazon alone is vanishing at a rate of 20,000 square miles a year.

One of the main reason that the forest destructions is so harmful is the loss of native habitats.  The world’s native animals will only live in certain countries for example, the kiwi bird is only found in NZ, while the koala only lives in Australia.  By cutting down forests, we will lose native trees like the manuka tree which is in NZ.  If we destroy the animal’s native habitat, there won’t be any grass so that means that it would lead to the erosion of the land and the animals would have nothing to eat.

Trees are a commodious source of food for herbivores and workers are cutting down all of them for resources.  The food chain will be affected as there will be no herbivores left and most carnivores feed on them.  Also, there won’t be any more plants for the herbivores to eat.  Soon every herbivore and carnivore will then they will succumb (R.I.P) and become extinct...  FOREVER!!!  The outcome might be that people will become weak as some people (non-vegetarians) eat animals and also plants will relinquish life (death).

If all of this rapid destruction of forests continues, then the native animals of different countries will slowly start to die out and then the countries will not have any more native animals left.  These companies are very greedy and all they want is money.  We can prevent this by not buying the products of those companies and then the companies will have to change the way they produce their products hopefully more environmentally friendly methods. Scientists have proved that all of this disintegrating will lead to a major loss of animals.

Well done Pratham and Viraj, a great transactional text. You have included a range of sentence openers and use lots of emotive language. Can you find a fact to support your text?

1 comment:

  1. Great Job Pratham, Viraj and Chantelle!
    I liked the way you guys used emotive language, facts and evidence to make the Transactional Writing more interesting.
    Ka Pai!